Roger, this pulled me in immediately. The quake feels vivid and terrifying, but the emotional core is what stayed with me. And that ending is perfect, tender, authentic, and beautifully human. Great work.
It feels like everything breaks, but what stays is just holding on to each other in the middle of it. That part stays with you more than the quake itself.
This was so awesome! It is very intriguing like each verse revealing something new. That's how it felt like to me. I didn't expect it to go where it when I first started reading. Brilliantly done.
this poem is actually riveting. The suspense you built and the fact that you managed to maintain the tension, is not a skill all writers, and even fewer poets, can claim. I am impressed. Deeply. And I am extremely glad to have read this excellent poem.
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Roger, this pulled me in immediately. The quake feels vivid and terrifying, but the emotional core is what stayed with me. And that ending is perfect, tender, authentic, and beautifully human. Great work.
Monica
thank you :) the more I do it, the more I love it, writing. feels like I’ve been gifted with something precious.
Indeed you have. Now... One ought to be present for the unfolding of such a beautiful gift hmmm?
That is exactly how it happens.
Unable to make a plan
I thought of the ocean
When youth was tethered fast
And we had time to laugh
Now there's an uncountable distance
And the stars are half-remembered gems
Mocking me in their silence
And I am just a memory
And you are just a ghost
yeah, this grabs me!
VG!
Yikes!!
It feels like everything breaks, but what stays is just holding on to each other in the middle of it. That part stays with you more than the quake itself.
ty, yep, what else do we have, hmm?
That was a fantastic piece, Roger, I love how it came from that prompt into this life of its own. Great stuff.
ty 🫶
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hello :)
🔥 hello
This is really cool! 🥰 Was drawn in immediately! 🖤
thank you. I’m surprised every day by where a prompt can take me :) 🫶
Absolutely… I‘m really glad we have such a great fantasy-machine in our heads! 😁
This was so awesome! It is very intriguing like each verse revealing something new. That's how it felt like to me. I didn't expect it to go where it when I first started reading. Brilliantly done.
nothing like a good disaster to focus your priorities :)
Roger,
this poem is actually riveting. The suspense you built and the fact that you managed to maintain the tension, is not a skill all writers, and even fewer poets, can claim. I am impressed. Deeply. And I am extremely glad to have read this excellent poem.
thank you so much!
I felt every moment of that terrifying experience. The way you described the shaking and the urgency was heart-pounding. 😱
I’ve been through a few, though none quite that terrifying :)
Wow you are amazing ♥️
This was gripping!!
thanks, it literally gripped me, in the writing - stream of consciousness (and a little polish after) 🫶
The most rewarding style! Loved it!
thank you! 🫶